Trifextra: Week Fifty-Nine
A chill mist coils amid the heated crowd
Cooling and containing.
In small pockets of relief and reflection,
Tension flushed faces slacken into peaceful tone as
Angry sweat gives way to goose flesh.
Photo credit: Bérenger ZYLA / Foter.com / CC BY-NC-ND
This weekend we're asking for exactly 33 words inspired by this photo. .
I love the sense of calm that washes over this piece as it progresses-until "angry sweat gives way to goose flesh."
ReplyDeleteAmazingly written!!
Thank you, Valerie! I can't leave well enough alone. Gotta go weirdo.
DeleteThe chill cooling and containing heat. A good line.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I'm glad you stopped by.
Deletepockets of relief and reflection - that is a beautiful turn of phrase.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Barbara! Sometimes the Muse just has her way with me. ;-)
DeleteRenee, I love how you blended mood, movement, and temperature together. The picture is evocative, and you did the prompt associated with it proud!
ReplyDeleteThanks also for stopping by my blog and commenting. Good work, hon. Amy
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Thank you, Amy! I appreciate your comment, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
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ReplyDeleteThank you, Steven!
DeleteOoo I felt the gooseflesh rising on my arms!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Draug, so did I as I was writing.
DeleteOooh, I felt that drop in temperature. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sarah! I was hoping that would come across.
DeleteSo lovely! Makes me long for those warm summer days under the sprinkler... Well done!
ReplyDeleteNice interplay of hot and cold.
ReplyDeleteThe gooseflesh made me think that they were maybe being lulled into peace against their will. But that's clearly just me! I too loved the hot/cold contrast and the moistness.
ReplyDeleteLovely and visceral!
ReplyDeletethat was a very soothing piece. the sense of calm from hot to cold, very well done.
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