Friday, March 22, 2013

Rebel Yelp

Trifextra: Week Sixty 









This weekend, we are revisiting a prompt we've done before.  We are giving you three words and asking that you add another 33 to them to make a complete 36-word response.  You may use the words in any order you choose. 
Our three words are:
remember
rain
rebellion
Now you give us yours.



They would fight to the finish!  
They'd win back their slowly disappearing rights. 
They wouldn't take it anymore! 

The news said the rebellion was over before it began.
I only remember standing alone in the rain.

36 comments:

  1. That last line...! )': Lovely, heartbreaking work.

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  2. I love that last line. Chilling and beautiful.

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  3. Very nice! That last line makes it so personal. Great job!

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  4. So much emotion in so few words. Well done

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  5. what an exceptional ending

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  6. left with a lonely remorse - sad, but well done.

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  7. I echo the feeling that the contrast between the two stanzas is reall amazing!

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  8. Very interesting and the last line is haunting. Nice!

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  9. Oh those last two lines are pure art!

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  10. Lovely and sad! Like everyone else, I really love that last line. Well done!

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  11. I swear I didn't read yours before writing mine! ;) Well done and clever take on the prompt. lol!

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  12. The others have said it all. That last line, in contrast to the call to action before it... good stuff.

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  13. All that fighting spirit and hopefulness, snuffed out so quickly. The rain is the perfect metaphor for defeat. I loved this piece!

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  14. Wow, powerful! Beautifully written.

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  15. Oh, so very sad and heartbreaking. Well done.

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  16. Yup. I agree. The ending zaps it.

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  17. Yeah, not only alone but in the rain...

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  18. Yep, the dichotmous lines tell a story of many more than 36 words. Great composition Renee.

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  19. This was brilliant. Such impact in so few words!

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  20. Yep. That last line does it.

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  21. Great last line.

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  22. The anger and positivity of the exclamation marks then the subtleness and sadness in the last two lines.
    Well done.

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  23. Fantastic work, sublime last line!

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  24. You captured something that is all too true. Good piece.

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  25. Very nicely done! It can be such a confusing time when you're on the front lines like that.

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  26. Agree with others. Last line so powerful.

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  27. Poignant & full of intense emotion,loved it Renee:-)

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  28. Loved it ... last line rocked,

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