Friday, April 19, 2013

Semantics

Trifextra: Week Sixty-Four

Congratulations to all the winners!  Wish I'd had time (and energy) to visit and comment on every one.  
I'm beginning to believe that most of mine are becoming character studies for my...uh,characters.

 Anyway,
The Prompt: 
 This weekend we're asking for exactly 33 of your own words plus the following three words:

charge
century
lost
So 33 of yours plus 3 of ours means that everyone will have a 36 word response this time around.



"You lost my sword, Lillian?"

 The demon bitch had been hounding her for the last century.  "It's not lost, Aslozoth."

 "Then, let me amend the charge, witch," Aslozoth's eyes burned red.  "You stole my sword, Lillian?"

Posted by Renee at 11:05 AM
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23 comments:

  1. AtreyeeApril 19, 2013 at 11:32 AM

    Ah,great play on words here & Lillian has it coming-she better run!:-)

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  2. AnonymousApril 19, 2013 at 11:57 AM

    Ha. Funny. Love humor in fantasy, hard to do! These two seem like supernatural frenemy's!

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  3. KirApril 19, 2013 at 1:28 PM

    perfect and FUNNY! Oh yes, this was wonderful. "Amend the charge" what a fantastic way to accuse her.

    HAPPY WEEKEND

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  4. NennaApril 19, 2013 at 1:38 PM

    Ooooh, Lillian's in trouble! (said in that sing-song voice kids use) Fun take on the prompt.

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  5. AnonymousApril 19, 2013 at 4:10 PM

    I don't think this will end well! I like how you worked the words in - especially "charge".

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  6. CarrieApril 19, 2013 at 6:33 PM

    uh oh...Lillian is going to get her butt kicked...unless she magically makes that sword appear...to either give back to the demon OR to kill him :)

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  7. tedstrutzApril 19, 2013 at 6:38 PM

    I really liked this, Renee. Perfect use of all three words to make your story.

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  8. AnonymousApril 19, 2013 at 6:56 PM

    Nice piece. I wish there was more to it.

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  9. PirateApril 19, 2013 at 7:29 PM

    I think there is a touch of humour about, lovely writing in this demonic scene of fantasy, but the humour comes from him being a bit of a fool...no warrior ever, ever loses his sword, so it shows aside that is flawed..though the sword is maybe...stolen..clearly!

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  10. AnonymousApril 20, 2013 at 10:15 AM

    yup, I'd go back to lost & I'm looking for it now...

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  11. BoApril 20, 2013 at 11:12 AM

    I think he's mad! Very good...

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  12. AnonymousApril 20, 2013 at 3:37 PM

    Perfectly clever.

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  13. Valerie BoersmaApril 20, 2013 at 4:47 PM

    I love this Renee! The tone is so much darker now now! Oh to know what happens next...

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  14. DraugApril 20, 2013 at 8:12 PM

    hahaha Love this! xD Character studies are great fun! I know I've used 33-word prompts for them before.

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  15. LanceApril 20, 2013 at 8:14 PM

    action, edgy dialogue, and me wanting another 1036 words. excellent.

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  16. barbaraApril 20, 2013 at 8:20 PM

    yes, agreeing with Lance . . . I want more of the tale. :)

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  17. UnknownApril 20, 2013 at 9:35 PM

    Yipe. Amend the charge - Perfect words.

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  18. UnknownApril 21, 2013 at 12:28 AM

    The Undead team wanted to nominate you for a Liebster award. Please come get it if you like!
    http://poetryofthenetherworld.blogspot.com/2013/04/the-liebster-award.html

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  19. TrifectaApril 21, 2013 at 7:56 AM

    Your thirty-three words seem so much more than mine. :-) Great job fleshing out a tale in such a short space.

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  20. SuzanneApril 21, 2013 at 2:04 PM

    This is great Renee! Such a creative take on the prompt. Here's hoping Lillian has a little something up her sleeve!

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  21. DanaApril 21, 2013 at 2:49 PM

    Ooh, I love how Aslozoth busts the "demon bitch" (love that!) for lying to him by omission... I'm looking forward to hearing Lillian's response to that! ;-) Brilliant writing, Renee!

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  22. ShreyaKashyapApril 21, 2013 at 5:28 PM

    lost, stole ... ! Lillian sure is in trouble ... Brilliant, Renee :)

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  23. kymmApril 21, 2013 at 6:19 PM

    Brilliant use of the words!

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