Saturday, February 4, 2012

The Hunt

Write On Edge: Red-Writing-Hood
We’ve asked you to show us in 400 words or less how your character reacts to a piece of music. Did music advance a story line or flesh out a character–or both?



The door was locked and the blinds drawn. Anne Marie contemplated the gear laid out on the old chest. How many years had it been since she done a real hunt? Too many?

“Look at the way we gotta hide what we’re doin’…”

She reached for the hilt of her hunting blade. It nestled comfortably into her hand, eroded to her fingers by heavy use over countless years. It bled confidence into her, she was still fit, still trained daily. She was still the best.

“Cause what would they say if they ever knew…”

She could feel it behind her, stalking. The beast that was also a man. But this wasn't a man afflicted with a curse. This was a monster reveling it’s blood rage. This one didn't want to learn control. This one embraced the beast and lusted for the kill.

“And so, we’re running just as fast as we can…”

The black leotard she wore moved like a second skin, the soft boots nearly soundless in the leaf litter of the woods. Her hand reached to softly touch the hilt again, reassuring her with its presence.

“Holdin’ on to one another’s hand…”

She shifted direction, made a few turns. Soon she was behind the beast. Anne Marie could smell the animal odor, mingled with sweat and dirty human. She was close now. She drew the ancient blade from its sheath.

“I think we’re alone now, there doesn’t seem to be anyone around…”

Closer now, she could hear its breath huffing as it tracked its prey. Or rather what it thought was its prey. She stepped from behind a tree, blade at the ready. It realized its mistake and turned.

“I think we’re alone now, the beating of our hearts is the only sound.”

12 comments:

  1. I like how your intertwined the lyrics.

    Anne Marie seems determined and focused. Good stuff.

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    1. Thank you Lance. This was fun once I finally picked a song. I may have had the story first. Then the music sorta happened.

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  2. Best interpretation of those lyrics I've heard in a long time.

    And the piece, with or without them, has a music all it's own.

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    1. It is an amusing interpretation I think. Once I had the story, the song started knocking. It took some persuading for it to convince me it could work.

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    1. Thanks Brandon.
      Anne Marie is a relatively new character I'm getting to know.

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  4. Love the lyrics. I always thought it was a creepy song. And you're proven me right!

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    1. Heehee! At the least it was rather risqué.
      Thanks for reading.

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  5. Wow, that song takes me back to my days of ditching school. I haven't heard that in ages. Nicely done.

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    1. Thank you!
      I was pretty sure I was showing my age with that one. But it had elements that I liked to go with the story.

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  6. This reminds me of something I wrote yesterday, with interspersed dialogue instead of song lyrics. Love it!

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    1. Thank you for reading! I'll look for your work, it sounds like my kind of stuff.

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