tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post3244476684090531027..comments2023-05-14T03:34:24.671-04:00Comments on Elsetime & Otherwhen: ArrivalReneehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-91357228603825310732012-02-12T14:25:42.900-05:002012-02-12T14:25:42.900-05:00Your first paragraph was so good. I could see it,...Your first paragraph was so good. I could see it, hear it, smell it. The description was fantastic, and I totally feel like I've had that same sort of "dance at the door" while trying to decide whether or not to go in.Jen Has A Penhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01985462114936261199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-12006939965260032872012-02-12T08:48:14.172-05:002012-02-12T08:48:14.172-05:00I don't think I read Jonah's first piece, ...I don't think I read Jonah's first piece, but I liked this so went back to catch up. Now I'm really intriuged! I'm interested to see what sort of help he was looking for at Renewal. Even the name of the diner seems to hold more than just words on a sign...<br /><br />Nice job Renee! You've done a great job humanizing a predator, and I can see how, in a longer work, we angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-3196566248032762122012-02-11T20:27:29.025-05:002012-02-11T20:27:29.025-05:00Thanks for stopping by!
And oh yes, that diner h...Thanks for stopping by! <br />And oh yes, that diner has seen some things....Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-17705237513119095242012-02-11T02:33:30.166-05:002012-02-11T02:33:30.166-05:00I am intrigued. I see a lot of opportunity and pot...I am intrigued. I see a lot of opportunity and potential here. That diner sort of jumped out at me as a place that holds stories.Jackhttp://www.thejackb.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-37441647194813001992012-02-10T19:24:28.324-05:002012-02-10T19:24:28.324-05:00Thank you!
You're right, I tried to combine tw...Thank you!<br />You're right, I tried to combine two parts and evidently lost the continuity. I'll watch out for that in the future.Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-4519574259195172372012-02-10T19:21:56.136-05:002012-02-10T19:21:56.136-05:00Thank you!
I love the fairy godmother reference. T...Thank you!<br />I love the fairy godmother reference. There is a little more to Katie, as there is to Jonah.Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-78913604591865731012012-02-10T19:19:35.067-05:002012-02-10T19:19:35.067-05:00Thank you for reading both. And I'm glad my c...Thank you for reading both. And I'm glad my characters came through well for you.Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-86832422299940415752012-02-10T19:16:01.713-05:002012-02-10T19:16:01.713-05:00Thank you Cameron!
Jonah was supposed to be a one ...Thank you Cameron!<br />Jonah was supposed to be a one hit wonder. Then" someone" suggested nanowrimo. And poof! some craziness popped out.Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-50642786200479079822012-02-10T16:05:31.381-05:002012-02-10T16:05:31.381-05:00I love that the odors caressed him, simply brillia...I love that the odors caressed him, simply brilliant. I think the point of view jumped mid-scene, but I love where this is going. Excellent story progression and I'm looking forward to what happens next.shelton keys dunninghttp://sheltonkeysdunning.blogspot.com/2012/02/write-on-edge-pick-number-challenge.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-16409899293190842092012-02-10T14:16:53.090-05:002012-02-10T14:16:53.090-05:00Katie is such a great representative of the fairy-...Katie is such a great representative of the fairy-godmother archetype, but with a pleasingly human pragmatic element. And Jonah definitely makes me curious! Good Stuff!Venushttp://imnotwritinganovel.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-70407708502480997812012-02-10T14:00:11.275-05:002012-02-10T14:00:11.275-05:00So glad I went back and read the previous posting....So glad I went back and read the previous posting. Poor Jonah. Though hopefully he doesn't get too attached to this lady, we wouldn't want every encounter he has with a woman to end in that way. This piece is really nicely done, brings out how chipper Katy is, and how very wary Jonah is.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2760035641523636365.post-48575478480314483242012-02-09T23:20:46.975-05:002012-02-09T23:20:46.975-05:00I re-read Jonah's other piece, just now, and I...I re-read Jonah's other piece, just now, and I'm so glad. I got the sense in the beginning that there's a predator in this character. Great job with that subtle showing. And there's an interesting continuity with time and the Gran. I like where this is going.Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.com